I like how you looked at the camera and I also liked you gave reasons why you wanted the car. Maybe next time you can mention the price of the car, other then that your video was really good.
Helena: As I mentioned in class, you've got a great start here. You've got lots of good information and solid reasons for your decision. You speak clearly and confidently, and you're fun to listen to.
For your next draft, see if you can focus more on trying to convince me that this is the car for you. Your facts say that you're trying to be persuasive, but, right now, your voice does not. See if you can use your persuasive voice a bit more actively. Don't just tell me; convince me! I need to be convinced...or no $3000. You've got the material to do this; now use your voice to win your case.
I like the way you held eye contact in the video, and also the length. Your argument wasn't too long or too short and it was right to the point. I feel like if you can speak louder and with more energy in your next video, you argument will be even more convincing.
Good job speaking clearly and having good arguments. Text time try not to spin in your chair,and maybe mention how much the rest of the car will cost and how you will pay for it.
I like how you looked at the camera and I also liked you gave reasons why you wanted the car. Maybe next time you can mention the price of the car, other then that your video was really good.
ReplyDeleteHelena: As I mentioned in class, you've got a great start here. You've got lots of good information and solid reasons for your decision. You speak clearly and confidently, and you're fun to listen to.
ReplyDeleteFor your next draft, see if you can focus more on trying to convince me that this is the car for you. Your facts say that you're trying to be persuasive, but, right now, your voice does not. See if you can use your persuasive voice a bit more actively. Don't just tell me; convince me! I need to be convinced...or no $3000. You've got the material to do this; now use your voice to win your case.
I like the way you held eye contact in the video, and also the length. Your argument wasn't too long or too short and it was right to the point. I feel like if you can speak louder and with more energy in your next video, you argument will be even more convincing.
ReplyDeleteGood job speaking clearly and having good arguments. Text time try not to spin in your chair,and maybe mention how much the rest of the car will cost and how you will pay for it.
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